Take me to a place,
where I can smell your grace.
Take me away,
to a Laughter of child’s play.
Take me home,
from sin city to Rome.
I’m lost,
where paths have been crossed.
I’m hiding,
to a symphony of world guiding.
I’m seeking,
from ohms to thorns that have been speaking.
Make me blind by touching my fervour, Β by thou means;
In the seeker of more I share my heart,
to a walk down the sunset I blindly follow,
As Impure,
As by thou Allure,
As I am taken by your highly cure.
19 responses to “‘fervour,”
THats beautiful, very well done!
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Mason, thank you so much!! Thank you for reading my work β₯οΈπ i truly appreciate it π
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Its a pleasure. Thank you for sharing it with me and the WP community .
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Of course, always my pleasure to share it. Thanks for the support π€
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Wow, this is amazing!!!
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Abhir, thank you so much!! Thank you for reading my work β₯οΈπ i truly appreciate it π
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Astounding lines and imagery…
“Make me blind by touching my fervour, by thou means;” especially, and onwards…
Yes, we gladly go blind following our fervour for someone we fall in romantic love with, especially when we sense their “touch”/response to it. And sometimes the cause of the pain or sacrifice leads to the cure. So beautifully written, the capitalizations and other Jojo-isms… and another very fetching photograph choice as well. Hugs dear friend, for sharing your magical poetry.
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Thank you so much, Lia!
Your comments are always on point and very thoughtful. I’m glad you liked especially that line. It was indeed supposed to be the core of the whole poem. When i wrote that part I was like; “hopefully at least one person will get it”! You showed me you did, so that a Hugh honorβ₯οΈ
Hahaha do i have my own jojo-isms ππ i think that’s a huge compliment, right π³β₯οΈ
You know i love it yo share my work, you make me inspired and feel the need to share. Thanks to people like you i didn’t give up yetβ₯οΈ
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Yes it’s absolutely meant as a huge compliment dear friend. Coined it lol! π It’ll go down in the poetry history books/blogs. ;)) π It’s the same for me re: inspiration… so thanks for that also. π€π€π
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p.s. and thank you so much for the kind words, now I feel honoured! Have a lovely day dear friend. :)) π
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Ahhaha, yaaaay compliment. You know what that mean; “blushing” timeπ³π³π€π€
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Whoops, Just pressed on send. Little to soon.
But, thank you so much dearest Lia β€οΈβ€οΈ you are an inspiration to us allππ
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Awwwwwwww thank you!!!!!!!! Same goes for you. π₯°π·π·π·πΊπ½ππ
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Hihihih yaaay π₯°π₯°ππ
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Lovely! ππ
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Thank you so much, offshore βΊοΈπ I’m glad you loved it β€οΈ
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Make me blind by touching my fervour, Β by thou means;
In the seeker of more I share my heart,
to a walk down the sunset I blindly follow,
From where you bring the words so perfectly Haan? Tell me!!πβ€β€
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Hahahaha, IDK π³ππ½ I Just follow my heart, mind and hand. They do all the work and I just observe π³β€οΈ
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