Was I a fiction in your mind….?
To be held by your thoughts
you have seen me blind.
I Took care of you as we weren’t touching our souls
that got lost in translation being unsigned.
I Was the hope while you eloped
and in sight of beauty we bind.
You saw my soul,
you held my heart,
yet I felt being declined.
As I was miserable for time
I left the world behind.
To have wishes of three I seek for my loving mystery
without you in twined.
21 responses to “‘unfeigned,”
Great lines. 🌺
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Thank you so much ☺️☺️❤️❤️
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Yesterday “she” was an imagination (Saccharine), today “he” is a fiction.
They both will make a pretty couple. Sorry, it was in the first person and so I couldn’t help!
Beautiful rhyme. I appreciate it more because it’s difficult for me to make the idea and rhyme go hand in hand. “I Was the hope while you eloped” – oh NO, that’s sad! And very catchy (again nice rhyme hope, elope).
“wishes of three” what’s that? And is there some wordplay – “in twined”?
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Hahaha, you got an Great eye on details! I love that. Yes both were also real people. (I always speak out of experience). Don’t every apologize, btw. it’s al fine by me 😊
“The whishes of three”. It’s like in Aladdin. He gets to have three wishes and could almost wish for everything, but eventually he Just wanted one thing. And that’s love, nothing else matters!!!
In twined is Indeed a Little wordplay over there, because he is ready to move on without her. Not wrapped any more. Of you know what I mean?
Thanks again for your interest, Nebula 😊❤️🙏🏽
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We end up saying a lot of thanks, let’s just skip it! And I want to say “The wishes of three” is a really nice metaphor. Silly me, didn’t think about it. Yeah, got it what you mean.
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Hahaha let’s do that Indeed, nebula 😂 and don’t feel silly 😂 glad you get it
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So many good lines… but the last ones are the best. Beautiful beautiful poem Jojo. Just like you. 🙏🤩💛❤︎🌻🙌🌷
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Hihihih yaaaay she likes it so much 😍😍🙈🙈 “blushing” 🤭😳 have a lovely day today, Lia ❤️❤️🤭🤭
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🥰🥰🙏🙏🌤💝✨Thanks and same to you Jojo 💛❤️🏆
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♥ ♥ ♥
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Hihihih thaank you, Bora❤️🤭
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Well said.
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Thank you so much, beachah 🤭❤️
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I absolutely loved the thought in the first line. “Was I a fiction in your mind?” Very beautifully written.
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Hihihih thank you so much, Jade 😊❤️
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Deep👌👌
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Thanks you so much 😊❤️
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Wowwww… Awesome👏🏻👏🏻👏🏻👏🏻
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Hihihih thank you again, Soni 🤗🤗🤭🤭❤️ appreciated 😍
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Amazing 🌹
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Thank you so much ❤️❤️
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